{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"41478131","dateCreated":"1313658595","smartDate":"Aug 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"matt.arsenal","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/matt.arsenal","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/gats-macbeth.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/41478131"},"dateDigested":1532254487,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Matthew's Example 1 Analysis","description":"Dagger scene example 1:<br \/>\nThe first example, the analysis of the dagger scene in Macbeth, lacks sophistication, structure and effectiveness. In some instances, the grammar is poor, e.g. 'he thinks over what his about to do'. The sentences also lack proper placement of commas and full stops. The writer of this assessment tends to change tense as well. For example, first he\/ she uses 'sees' and then uses 'went'. On top of this, the language is very informal and somewhat conversational.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"41416625","dateCreated":"1313456763","smartDate":"Aug 15, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"taylor_likes_bubbles","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/taylor_likes_bubbles","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/gats-macbeth.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/41416625"},"dateDigested":1532254487,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"example 1","description":"the  level of language in example 1 was not high enough for an exam - the language should be a  bit more advanced, e.g. is this a sign or something? (not really appropiate for exam conditions) she takes 3 sections to explain whats happening in the scene and analyses the language in dot points. I think that she should have spent more time explaing the language than explaining how macbeth is about to kill Duncan.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"41470117","body":"I agree. They made many spelling and grammar mistakes. They didn't really explain what some of the lines he spoke meant. They also got lots of plot points mixed up, didn't use the right language terms. She should have spent less time explaining how Macbeth kills Duncan (and getting it wrong) and more time actually explaining the language used in the play.","dateCreated":"1313632673","smartDate":"Aug 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"Kea102","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Kea102","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1298511557\/Kea102-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"41416503","dateCreated":"1313456427","smartDate":"Aug 15, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"BodenM","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/BodenM","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1300671237\/BodenM-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/gats-macbeth.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/41416503"},"dateDigested":1532254487,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"What was good, what was bad?","description":"Enter responses below \\\/","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"41416599","body":"Also, i agree with harrison on the easy to read part. :)","dateCreated":"1313456724","smartDate":"Aug 15, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"Christeenaloo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Christeenaloo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41416637","body":"The response was good althought the person seemed to write a lot on when and where the event was taking place. The person seemed to get the plot adn timing a bit confused eg. the bell rang before Macbeth murders the king not afterward. They obviouslt forgot to include certain points into their exam and just included them at the end. If they had included the techniques and quotes in the main thing and didn't just ramble on about the story line, it may have been much better.","dateCreated":"1313456787","smartDate":"Aug 15, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"REBECCA_WITCOMBE","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/REBECCA_WITCOMBE","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1338861647\/REBECCA_WITCOMBE-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41416651","body":"This response was pretty good. The student analyzed the dagger scene very well, there were just a few grammatical errors and also, it wasn't King Duncan's ghost that appeared at the banquet, it was actually Banquo's since he was killed by the orders of Macbeth. The response deserves a good mark because it was easy to understand and decent.","dateCreated":"1313456811","smartDate":"Aug 15, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"JenniferSeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/JenniferSeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41423593","body":"This analysis explained how Macbeth felt about the situation he was in and how he was pressured into doing it by Lady Macbeth. Different language features in the play were identified with examples, and explained how they related to this part of the play. However, there were a few grammatical errors and the summary was explained in too much detail. Also, some of the events described occurred after this scene and there were 2 mistakes about the plot. Firstly, the bell was rung before the murder, not after, and Macbeth saw Banquo's ghost at the dinner, not King Duncan's. Also, the quote that was used weren't explained in enough detail.","dateCreated":"1313478216","smartDate":"Aug 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"dean1996","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dean1996","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41448275","body":"This analysis was good. The amount of detail in the recounting of the event was perfect, it wasn't too long or too short. The actual analysis of the passage was very well-thought out. There were a few mistakes in terms of actually understanding the text. It was good that the language wasn't too formal and that it wasn't too colloquial, it made it very simple to comprehend what the passage was trying to convey.","dateCreated":"1313562054","smartDate":"Aug 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"declan.monro","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/declan.monro","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41469355","body":"I would give this analyisis a 12 out of 15 as it was well written, covered many vital areas in the scene and gave a thorough outlook of the events present. However, it wasn't well-planed as this person just brifly fitted in various techniques at the end rather than incorporating them in throughout the essay.","dateCreated":"1313631723","smartDate":"Aug 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"jamez1997","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jamez1997","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41470197","body":"I think this was a pretty good analysis.  It explains it clearly and simply although the fact that some fairly crucial scenes were mixed up and not correct - details wise - let it down quite a bit.  If you are doing a scene analysis you kind of need to know what you are talking about. Even though overall it was good, it would be much better if the facts were corrected.","dateCreated":"1313632811","smartDate":"Aug 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"emma.sleeman","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/emma.sleeman","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41478155","body":"Dagger scene example 1:<br \/>\nThe first example, the analysis of the dagger scene in Macbeth, lacks sophistication, structure and effectiveness. In some instances, the grammar is poor, e.g. 'he thinks over what his about to do'. The sentences also lack proper placement of commas and full stops. The writer of this assessment tends to change tense as well. For example, first he\/ she uses 'sees' and then uses 'went'. On top of this, the language is very informal and somewhat conversational.","dateCreated":"1313658685","smartDate":"Aug 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"matt.arsenal","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/matt.arsenal","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41480459","body":"I think this response was quite good, it felt easy to read and straightforward. There were however some thing that could make it even better. These could include fixing up some of the facts that are incorrect and at the end of the essay instead of listing the techniques in a dot point way try putting it in a paragraph. Also correct me if im wrong but im prettey shure he or she didnt even get to do a conslusion. nevertheless a good response.","dateCreated":"1313668632","smartDate":"Aug 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"KAV_IN_WIKI","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KAV_IN_WIKI","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1298198136\/KAV_IN_WIKI-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41539733","body":"This has lots of good ideas in it, which are laid out very clearly. There are a few mistakes at the beginning in terms of tense or where things just don't sound quite right. There aren't very many direct references to the text, the person just tells you what it means without showing how they know this. Maybe it would be better if each paragraph was somehow related to a line or particular quote or event. That\u2019s why the second last paragraph is good, it talks about events in the play and gives direct examples. The only other thing they could have improved on is having the language techniques throughout the analysis, rather than just at the end.","dateCreated":"1313904119","smartDate":"Aug 20, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"sophster1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/sophster1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41555487","body":"I don't actually know what was good in this. the person who wrote this has no concept of grammar and obviously completely misread the play - it was Banquo's ghost, not Duncan's that appears to Macbeth. The marker also misread the play, as that was ticked. There was no conclusion or flow to the analysis.","dateCreated":"1313977250","smartDate":"Aug 21, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"morgi72","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/morgi72","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1298511076\/morgi72-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"41556559","body":"The good bits of this were that is was well-written, and the ideas were well laid out. Unfortunately there were mistakes in it, such as saying that the ghost that appeared infront of Macbeth was Duncan, when it was actually Banquo's.","dateCreated":"1313979669","smartDate":"Aug 21, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"BodenM","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/BodenM","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1300671237\/BodenM-lg.jpg"}}],"more":5}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}